Post by tokyo3 on Mar 7, 2019 16:57:06 GMT -5
Would appreciate any critique on my query letter. If you posted a query and would like me to critique it, please let me know. Thank you!
Dear agent,
Sixteen-year-old Rina Mitani becomes emotionally invisible after she is raped. Mentally she is collapsing until she enrolls in kendo lessons, a Japanese martial art. By following kendo’s main tenet, discipline of the human character, she finds inner strength. However, she can never forget she was raped.
Depressed and wanting to erase her past, Rina attacks her overprotective mom with her bamboo sword and runs away to Tokyo with only her kendo gear. Rina continues her training, but on the way to her dojo, she is repeatedly groped by a middle-aged businessman during rush hour on the train. Disgusted with his wandering hands, she attacks him with a kitchen knife, which is concealed under her sleeve and gets away with it.
After attacking her molester, Rina realizes she needs be assertive. A trait she discovers while watching a talk show about hostess clubs and female entertainers who manipulate male clients for money. She takes a job at a hostess club and learns how to be aggressive. She also befriends a yakuza boss, eventually killing him, stealing 1,000,000 yen and fleeing to Osaka.
In Osaka, Rina becomes a kendo instructor and wife, but she suffers a miscarriage, which devastates her. Bitter with her life, she returns to her hometown and confronts her past.
SORROW, REVENGE, DEATH is an 86,000 word literary novel.
Dear agent,
Sixteen-year-old Rina Mitani becomes emotionally invisible after she is raped. Mentally she is collapsing until she enrolls in kendo lessons, a Japanese martial art. By following kendo’s main tenet, discipline of the human character, she finds inner strength. However, she can never forget she was raped.
Depressed and wanting to erase her past, Rina attacks her overprotective mom with her bamboo sword and runs away to Tokyo with only her kendo gear. Rina continues her training, but on the way to her dojo, she is repeatedly groped by a middle-aged businessman during rush hour on the train. Disgusted with his wandering hands, she attacks him with a kitchen knife, which is concealed under her sleeve and gets away with it.
After attacking her molester, Rina realizes she needs be assertive. A trait she discovers while watching a talk show about hostess clubs and female entertainers who manipulate male clients for money. She takes a job at a hostess club and learns how to be aggressive. She also befriends a yakuza boss, eventually killing him, stealing 1,000,000 yen and fleeing to Osaka.
In Osaka, Rina becomes a kendo instructor and wife, but she suffers a miscarriage, which devastates her. Bitter with her life, she returns to her hometown and confronts her past.
SORROW, REVENGE, DEATH is an 86,000 word literary novel.
