The Book That Writes Itself

Hi Korina,

I've made a few corrections for grammar and usage, and comments are below the query.

When Doriel finds Darkelf as a baby in the cold waters of Emerald River near Elf Land, she doesn't know he is the Ancient Chosen One. He grows up knowing Doriel as his mother. In his late teens, his only friend—a little dragon named Meril—helps him to move in a parallel universe. There they discover that humans exist and find themselves at the depths of Inner Earth, from where they can't escape.



In a parallel realm, an abused little girl named Maya knows she has a mission. Every night her father abuses her, but when she is going to bed she finds refuge in that great light which enters her room and takes her inside a spaceship, where friendly creatures talk to her telepathically about her mission.



In a 3rd realm—a higher planes of existence—Lord Arcturus and his twin flame, Victoria, arrange their next incarnation on planet Earth. They must recognize each other on Earth, in order for the Twin Flame Union to take place and allow them to fight together against the Matrix.



Worlds collide and the highest mission of all starts: to defeat the Matrix and Unite all the parallel universes.



The Book That Writes Itself is 70.556 words, and is my first novel. It serves as Part I of the proposed “The Magic Books” series. Within a week, this book got to rank 16 on Wattpad in sci-fi, and rank 5 in fantasy.

This sounds like an ambitions book, and it also sounds more for teens and young adults than middle schoolers. Have a girl abused by her father - you imply it's sexual abuse - is strong stuff for 11 year olds. Also, at 70K, it's too long for middle grade. I suggest you aim this at the Young Adult market. Having said that, I think it's important to clarify the ages of your main characters and identify who is the number one main character. You have several storylines converging in this query, but I'm confused by how they all come together and, again, who is the protagonist and what are the stakes for him or her.I suggest streamlining this query to focus on the main story thread and the main character so the agent has a sense of who this book is about and what dilemma is he facing. In your bio, if you've taken any writing courses or have had other stories on Wattpad, that would help so the agent gets a sense of your background. I hope some of these comments help and I wish you best success with your book!