Post by amscott on May 15, 2017 21:41:59 GMT -5
I'd appreciate any and all comments - be blunt, I can take it! Thanks in advance.
Significantly rewritten query:
Cary Sessan is the quintessential Scholar: doggedly researching the details of an unknown and unloved field, droning on about her work at the drop of a hat, and locking herself away from the world with her never-finished dissertation. But Scholar Sessan's travels mask the work of her alter-ego, Saree of Jericho, the first human space fold clock maintainer. Control of a human clocker would tip the balance of wealth and power in the galaxy; staying under the ecliptic is key. Despite all her efforts, rumors follow her. After a close call, Saree hitches a ride on Lightwave Fold Transport. The odd passengers and quirky crew should provide excellent cover, but staying aloof and maintaining her boring cover might get tricky—she’s lonely.
Captain Ruhger pays the bills by not asking too many questions. The Scholar's too-clean background and the fantastic rumors about her on merc-net make him nervous, but he allows her aboard the Lightwave. When someone attacks his Chef and his net, he knows why. But a contract is a contract, and Lightwave needs the credits. When Sessan herself becomes the target of the next attack, Ruhger must choose between the safety of his crew, the liquidity of his business and the secret desires of his heart.
Old query:
Lightwave’s battered but indomitable crew helps a humble Scholar—with a big secret—escape her enemies across the dangerous frontiers of space.
Captain Ruhger runs a tight ship. Or he tries to. His contracts are airtight, and he'll make the hard decisions for everyone’s safety. But when your crew—and family—consists of a flamboyant chef, a lethal pair of security experts, a staid engineer who occasionally berserks and a philandering purser, 'by the book' ends up in the shredder all too often.
The quiet Scholar requesting his last shuttle bay seems harmless. They desperately need the credits, so Ruhger ignores his niggling suspicions. Besides, the rest of the passengers are slightly off-orbit too; it’s pretty common when you run the fringes of space. When disaster strikes, he’s seriously regretting all his decisions on this fold. Is the Scholar the cause, or the target? Can Ruhger and his crew uncover the saboteur before they strike again? Will they make it to Cygnus alive?
LIGHTWAVE ONE: CLOCKER is an adult space opera, complete at 100K words. Lightwave Two: The Sisters of Cygnus and a prequel novella are fully drafted, but not polished.
Significantly rewritten query:
Cary Sessan is the quintessential Scholar: doggedly researching the details of an unknown and unloved field, droning on about her work at the drop of a hat, and locking herself away from the world with her never-finished dissertation. But Scholar Sessan's travels mask the work of her alter-ego, Saree of Jericho, the first human space fold clock maintainer. Control of a human clocker would tip the balance of wealth and power in the galaxy; staying under the ecliptic is key. Despite all her efforts, rumors follow her. After a close call, Saree hitches a ride on Lightwave Fold Transport. The odd passengers and quirky crew should provide excellent cover, but staying aloof and maintaining her boring cover might get tricky—she’s lonely.
Captain Ruhger pays the bills by not asking too many questions. The Scholar's too-clean background and the fantastic rumors about her on merc-net make him nervous, but he allows her aboard the Lightwave. When someone attacks his Chef and his net, he knows why. But a contract is a contract, and Lightwave needs the credits. When Sessan herself becomes the target of the next attack, Ruhger must choose between the safety of his crew, the liquidity of his business and the secret desires of his heart.
Old query:
Lightwave’s battered but indomitable crew helps a humble Scholar—with a big secret—escape her enemies across the dangerous frontiers of space.
Captain Ruhger runs a tight ship. Or he tries to. His contracts are airtight, and he'll make the hard decisions for everyone’s safety. But when your crew—and family—consists of a flamboyant chef, a lethal pair of security experts, a staid engineer who occasionally berserks and a philandering purser, 'by the book' ends up in the shredder all too often.
The quiet Scholar requesting his last shuttle bay seems harmless. They desperately need the credits, so Ruhger ignores his niggling suspicions. Besides, the rest of the passengers are slightly off-orbit too; it’s pretty common when you run the fringes of space. When disaster strikes, he’s seriously regretting all his decisions on this fold. Is the Scholar the cause, or the target? Can Ruhger and his crew uncover the saboteur before they strike again? Will they make it to Cygnus alive?
LIGHTWAVE ONE: CLOCKER is an adult space opera, complete at 100K words. Lightwave Two: The Sisters of Cygnus and a prequel novella are fully drafted, but not polished.
