Post by rainforest on Jun 20, 2017 20:36:40 GMT -5
Since her father’s unexpected death, seventeen-year-old Samantha Waterman has kept her grief locked away. When therapist-Mom reveals a plan to drag her and her brother to Costa Rica, where her Dad grew up to help them heal, Sam is devastated. They will live in an isolated community in the cloud forest with no telephones, no hot water, and no Internet. If the suicide shower and deadly Fer de Lance snake give any indication, Sam will be lucky to make it out alive, nevertheless thrive like her father always wanted.
As she begins to reconnect with her family, Sam’s haunted by memories of the day her father died. To keep her mind off the past, she works for a women’s Cooperative, painting rain forest scenes with a gaggle of old Ticas (Costa Rican ladies). When she falls in love with a nature-loving Tico who lights up even the darkest corners of the rainforest and then discovers a secret library, unearthing her father’s old journals, Sam begins to feel like she might heal.
But then Sam’s brother vanishes. Using clues buried in her father’s journal entries, Sam must navigate the tangled woods to find Nathan before she loses him, too.
Ooh! This sounds interesting. Some suggestions: "When therapist-Mom reveals a plan to drag her and her brother to Costa Rica, where her Dad grew up to help them heal, Sam is devastated" - could this be broken up a bit? Maybe "Sam's therapist-mom reveals a plan to take her and her brother Nathan to their father's old home in Costa Rica to help them heal. Sam is devastated.
"If the suicide shower and deadly Fer de Lance snake give any indication, Sam will be lucky to make it out alive, nevertheless thrive like her father always wanted." This one is a bit long and convoluted. Maybe break it into two? I think you could take out "nevertheless thrive like her father always wanted." I think it can go without saying that her parents want her to thrive.
"When she falls in love with a nature-loving Tico who lights up even the darkest corners of the rainforest and then discovers a secret library, unearthing her father’s old journals, Sam begins to feel like she might heal." I feel like these are huge plot points and they're kind of jammed together into one long sentence. Could you break it up to give each plot point more emphasis?